-: My Blind Date With Death :-
Last week I saw a dream. The dream was about a romantic affair….. myself going on a blind date….. only to find out…. that my blind date is…. none other than..... my own Death!
I always wondered how my death would look like. I thought she would be scary, ugly and would frighten me.
To my surprise, she was pretty. She had an amazing glow on her face. She had a double chin, just like me. Her long hairs were covering some part on the left side of her face. She was extraordinarily beautiful. I had never seen such a beauty.
Two things caught my attention. Her eyes were full of 'life'…. and she had sweet a 'killer' smile. Prominent, and yet Contradicting.
We were sitting next to each other on a lonely beach. Evening’s sunshine was giving a golden touch to the sand.
She was continuously gazing at me, as if she was silently expressing her desire towards me. She was smiling, as if she wanted to kill me with her smile. So magical and attractive was her smile that I kept wondering what to speak.
The waves and winds were talking to each other and wanted us to join in, by saying something.
With a sigh, I broke the silence and asked, "What should I call you Dear Death?"
She smiled, as if she appreciated my initiative to speak up. Pretending to be surprised, she said "Oh! So you know who I am? Whatever you call me, you may give me various names, the truth still remains the same!"
I nodded and suggested, "May I call you 'My Life'?"
She looked amazed, wanting to say something but may be couldn’t find the words and just kept quiet.
I always wondered how my death would look like. I thought she would be scary, ugly and would frighten me.
To my surprise, she was pretty. She had an amazing glow on her face. She had a double chin, just like me. Her long hairs were covering some part on the left side of her face. She was extraordinarily beautiful. I had never seen such a beauty.
Two things caught my attention. Her eyes were full of 'life'…. and she had sweet a 'killer' smile. Prominent, and yet Contradicting.
We were sitting next to each other on a lonely beach. Evening’s sunshine was giving a golden touch to the sand.
She was continuously gazing at me, as if she was silently expressing her desire towards me. She was smiling, as if she wanted to kill me with her smile. So magical and attractive was her smile that I kept wondering what to speak.
The waves and winds were talking to each other and wanted us to join in, by saying something.
With a sigh, I broke the silence and asked, "What should I call you Dear Death?"
She smiled, as if she appreciated my initiative to speak up. Pretending to be surprised, she said "Oh! So you know who I am? Whatever you call me, you may give me various names, the truth still remains the same!"
I nodded and suggested, "May I call you 'My Life'?"
She looked amazed, wanting to say something but may be couldn’t find the words and just kept quiet.
I continued, "So my Life, shall we move? Tell me where to?"
She responded in a witty voice, "You always wanted to see me, go with me. This would be your final date…. Your date with destiny!" and She winked at me.
There was a mischievous spark in her eyes. I could clearly see it as I was looking straight into her eyes.
I replied calmly, "Would go the way you want, so you take this ahead. I am anyways not a good planner, and want to see what you have in store for me!"
I paused for few seconds, “There is a formality to ask for a last wish” I said and smiled at her.
She looked at me with wider smile, as if she was having heavenly pleasure. She held my left hand with her right hand. This was the first time she touched me. It was a 'warm' touch, which sent 'cold' vibes through my body and mind.
She then fiddled with my hair, touched my cheek and tapped on my nose with her left hand, still holding my left hand.
She said "I know your last wish dear. You want all the happiness for that one special person in your life."
I was amazed and yet confused, how did she know… this seemed like an illusion to me. My vision got blurred, I felt like my Life was going away from me.
At that moment, she wiped my tears and held my shoulder tightly. I broke down and hugged my Life, as tight as I could.
To my surprise, She was just sitting idle, no sense of reaction from her. I urged “Come on, hold me, hug me. I am all yours, take me with you.”
With a firm voice, she asked, "Then what about your last wish?"
I was startled and said "What does this mean?"
She replied "All the suffering, sorrow and pain you are going through is a result of special person in your life. That person has asked this for you".
I was so stunned that I pinched myself. What I heard was real, still my mind was not ready to believe this.
She continued, "Yes, and at this moment prayers and wishes of that person are so stronger than yours that I can’t take you with me. You have to live life like this, which you feel like hell. No escape from this for long. Hence I can’t give you any relief".
Looking at my nervous face, she said, "Don’t worry honey, I am always with you. You will be able to see me every day. I will fascinate you. You may feel that I am teasing you or hurting you by not taking you away with me, but I am helpless."
Then she got up holding my hand. She took me in knee deep water in the sea. The Sun was about to set, giving a feeling like it was melting into the sea.
She held my arms, and whispered in my ears, "I can't see you like this, but this is what you chose. If you want to make that person happy, you have to live like this. You would live in pain every moment, and in every moment, you have to die every millisecond."
I was in sheer shock. I tried to recover. I shook my head and said,
उनकी तमन्ना पूरी करने के लिए,
हम मौत के साथ भी जी कर देखेंगे..!
खुश रहे वोह और पूरी हो उनकी दुआ,
इस लिए हर पल में हज़ार मौत मर कर देखेंगे...!!!
'My Life' was shocked with this unexpected reply. She looked deep into my eyes. That spark and wittiness was all gone. Her eyes were getting wet.
She was hardly able to look at me. Then suddenly she kissed me, passionately… …. again and again.... with more n more passion..... and……. and……. and I opened my eyes.
I was back in the real world from my dream. I felt like I had just experienced a ‘Kiss of Death’! I had just enjoyed this surprise date with Death, oh oh, I mean ‘My Life’, as I named her.
I sat down, thinking about this unforgettable date I had and started to have a feeling that someone is with me…. a companion… who will always be with me now.
I wondered if this dream would ever come true… I would love to go on this date. I smiled, thinking about ‘My Life’, and got up to get ready for my daily routine, with a thought….
She was hardly able to look at me. Then suddenly she kissed me, passionately… …. again and again.... with more n more passion..... and……. and……. and I opened my eyes.
I was back in the real world from my dream. I felt like I had just experienced a ‘Kiss of Death’! I had just enjoyed this surprise date with Death, oh oh, I mean ‘My Life’, as I named her.
I sat down, thinking about this unforgettable date I had and started to have a feeling that someone is with me…. a companion… who will always be with me now.
I wondered if this dream would ever come true… I would love to go on this date. I smiled, thinking about ‘My Life’, and got up to get ready for my daily routine, with a thought….
एक ही दुआ अब मांगनी है हर रोज़,
काश हमारी तड़प से उनका दिल भर जाए..!
रेहेम आए मौत को कभी तो हम पर,
और मौत हमे अपने साथ ले जाए...!!!
In my opinion....your first para reveals the story....you could have kept a suspence that it was your dream and started with you sitting with her on a beach, explaining what happened, and they at the end revealing the fact that it was a dream would have kept the readers interest.....
ReplyDeleteNot a bad attempt......
looking forward for the next one....
Cheers
wow! nice idea... on a 2nd thought, even I feel that it would have made this more interesting to reveal at teh end tht it was all a dream... thanks alot!
ReplyDelete2nd post would be coming your way... but after a short time ;)
Pretty good, Buwa...Probably you could have kept the "Death" word as a surprize package and revealed your blind date was with "Death" that would have retained the curiosity longer!
ReplyDeleteGood concept but not very well presented. I have a feeling that you are thinking in Marathi & writing in English. Best of luck tho!
ReplyDelete@Ash - If I keep it as a surprise, then the entire conversation has to be in different context. May be I would write anotehr version of this story, the way you have said.
ReplyDelete@Akshay - Thank you. This was my first attempt towards writing.... your feedback and suggestions would help me to know where to improve. Would try to focus on ur inputs.
Hi, I am pretty fascinated with your concept and story. Although I think it doesn't matter if you reveal at the beginning that it is a dream or if you give us that piece of info. What can make it interesting is - keeping it short, crisp and to the point. End the story when the death reveals that she cant take him because his other half wants him back. Besides, try to be clear on what you write. Also please check for grammar.
ReplyDeleteLet me know if this helps. Keep writing...
thanks Aditi... your feedback is very valuable and it certainly helps. I will try to follow these things while writing new short stories.
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